"I am still standing in the doorframe of your goodbye. " This line is maybe my favorite, but there are so MANY to choose from! This is lovely....it's like an ode to lost love, or rather, almost-lost love, because this speaker can keep holding on forever if she wants to. This is strong. And filmy/gauzy. It's salty the way a breeze can be salty. And the image of the speaker pulling him by his pocket, risking herself---it is just f'ing STELLAR!!!!
"I am still standing in the doorframe of your goodbye. " This line is maybe my favorite, but there are so MANY to choose from! This is lovely....it's like an ode to lost love, or rather, almost-lost love, because this speaker can keep holding on forever if she wants to. This is strong. And filmy/gauzy. It's salty the way a breeze can be salty. And the image of the speaker pulling him by his pocket, risking herself---it is just f'ing STELLAR!!!!
Thank you so much, Rebecca. I wanted to write more, but I have found that this particular length of posts are well tolerated on Substack 💓💕
But it’s so well worth writing more. Or more of this in another piece. You could write more and submit it elsewhere?
That's a great idea, Rebecca. Do you really think it is good enough? Publishable material?
I agree with Rebecca that line! I am still standing in the doorway of your goodbye is unbelievable but the whole piece is so moving xx
Thank you so much, Hannah. Someday maybe we can sit together and I’d love to tell you more. Xx
I would like that very much Nazish x
Well, dear Nazish - so much to love here.
"My distractions wear your one silver earring. My dreams sound like your footsteps walking away. "
You capture the essence of how a love becomes part of you, and why the loss of a lover feels so physical....
Then you have to decide what to do with that love.
Best Wishes - Dave
It is physical. Yes. Even when the love was hardly physical. Some loves just cut you that deep to the bone, dear Dave.
I'm very moved by the visceralness with which you describe this loss, Nazish!
Thank you, Conny. Part of it is real and part is fiction.
"I am still standing in the doorframe of your goodbye."
A magnificent phrase. When I say a singular word moves your writing forward, in this case it would be "doorframe"
Ah, I see now! ☺️❤️❤️❤️
Breathtaking!! “I am still standing in the doorframe of your goodbye.” Gave me goosebumps ♥️
I am so glad that it spoke to you, Jen. Part of it is fiction. An extension, I dreamed up. But part of it is very very real. 💕💕💕
Oh my goodness, Nazish! Beautiful! ❤️❤️
Thank you so much, Rea ❤️❤️❤️
ahhh. Boundless beauty. Only one with a beautiful heart can pen this !
That's great praise coming from you, Som. Thank you so much 😊
So much raw emotion but I was struck by this line: I am still standing in the doorframe of your goodbye...